As conversas de awkreadr (@hlhthia)

churro_picking

6 days ago

I need you to know that your writing is amazing, It's such a bittersweet slow burn which I usually really hate, but for some reason your writing makes it acceptable in my brain, you truly have a talent that I haven't seen in wattpad for a fat MINUTE. Please make sure to take care of yourself, and if you need a break or anything let us, know your readers will always be waiting for your art

Hey! I just finished reading your fic (so far) after about a day and a half, and I saw that you wanted my thoughts on it, so I figured I'd share! Short Summary: I LOVED THIS PSYCHOLOGICAL HORROR OF A FIC!!! IT'S GREAT!!!

I think my favourite parts were how you wrote the action/fight scenes. Omg HOW DO YOU DO IT??? I've always struggled writing fight scenes in my own fic, and while reading yours, I've been taking notes on different words and the grammar used to see if it could help me improve my own writing LMAO!
I'm also a fan of how you never once romanticised Slade and Y/N's dynamic, it's always been my biggest worry when reading fics similar to this one that the abuse and terror would be treated as just an "okay" thing. But you didn't do that at all! I also enjoy the mystery, both the present ones, such as what Slade's motives are, and the unknown aspects, like Y/N's backstory or how she was recruited as Slade's apprentice. IT'S SO COOL TO HAVE TO PIECE THE PUZZLES TOGETHER!!

The only issue I really had is Y/N and Robin's dynamic, I am aware of the characters acting OOC, but I'm not seeing much of a slowburn between the two. I mean, if it was framed more like a passive "Enemies to lovers" thing instead of a slow burn I probably wouldn't have much of a problem. Though what bothers me is how much of an ASS Robin is, like multiple times while reading I was like: "How is this RUDE mf supposed to be the leader of this team?". I mean, I'm sure you're building it all up, but after nine chapters I was really hoping to see something. Then again maybe I'm just an impatient reader BAHAH

The rest of the characters though, I think were excellent! Love Starfire and Beastboy, definitely my fav's in this fic! This fic in general is very underrated and I hope it will get the recognition it deserves someday! KEEP COOKING CHEF!! LOVE YOUR WORK!!!

hlhthia

@YaLikeJazz3489 No reader is too impatient no worries!! I appreciate any feedback and it’s very valid to feel that way since I do tend to yap a lot per chapter so it probably feels longer than nine chapters haha. (Y/N) here does need therapy so your fics (Y/N) is valid to think that lol, but she’ll get there eventually…Hope you enjoy what comes next! ;))

Oct 09 • Responder

YaLikeJazz3489

@hlhthia oh my goodness thank you so much for the tips! And yeah, as a reader I'll keep up my patience and continue enjoying your work! Hope I didn't sound too harsh when talking about Robin LMAO! I do see now about how Robin see's Y/N as a duplicate of Slade, can't wait to see that hopefully change in future chapters. 
            
            I also think it's super cool having this universe's Y/N have no powers, it makes her wins feel even more earned if that makes sense. Gosh, if my fic's Y/N ever met this fic's Y/N I feel like she'd be like: "Girl omg you need therapy..." BAHAHA. But enough of me rambling!

Oct 09 • Responder

hlhthia

No, no that’s fair! That’s also something I really have a hard time balancing, I’m trying to show small cracks here and there but I know Robin doesn’t exactly trust very easily so I’m trying to make this transition slow to show how mistrustful (and then rude) he is because in a way, (Y/N) represents Slade to him he’s extra cautious and bitter (since in a way he did trust her in the “Go!” chapter). BUT! Don’t worry now that this transition is somewhat bridged, you’ll see it more trust me !! For the fight scenes, honestly my friend is a thesaurus or something similar (asking Google/ChatGPT for synonyms for certain words because that’s where I personally get stuck). Also, when I feel like it sounds a bit bland or repetitive I try to insert internal thoughts (because really, that’s what us, the readers, are following at the end). What really helps me plan those out is picturing it—also fun fact, I  specifically had (Y/N) have no powers because I just didn’t know how I’d be smart with her fighting style :’)). Also don’t downplay your fighting scenes either, they’re super fun and easy to follow (which really makes or breaks fight scenes sometimes). Sometimes, we criticise our writing much harsher than how others see it, so keep that in mind!

Oct 07 • Responder

hlhthia

Sep 22

Thank you so much for 1K reads on “The Apprentice” !! I’m so so grateful to each and every one of you for even sparing a glance and giving a chance to my writing (wow, that rhymed!). 
          
          College has been (for a better word) on my behind, so I’m sorry for the slower updates but they’ll definitely slow down a bit more since I don’t think I can give you all (what I think) my best work within a week (maybe in 2, maybe in 3, but hopefully no longer than that!).
          
          Still, I definitely won’t drop this book since it truly is my escape. So if you’re wondering—where did she go? I swear I’m right here :’))
          
          I encourage you all to interact too! The most exciting part after publishing a chapter for me is to see if anyone leaves a comment. I’ll reply to every single one, of course, and DMS are also encouraged (I promise I don’t bite!!). 
          
          To whoever is reading this: You’re beautiful and I hope you have an amazing day :))