the_aura_

Hii friend 
          I need a favour 
          Will you please read my story "drowning girl " and  tell me if I need any improvement. 
          I am in real need of some suggestions so that I can continue. 
          Thank you.

hoedontplaywitme

also using published or popular books as a guide may help, especially on the basics. 
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hoedontplaywitme

it has a good plot but it does need some work. your spacing, sentence patterns, explanations and descriptions need some work. when you write monologues try spacing it out and drawing out your character’s emotions. also when you write descriptions and explanations prolong them to keep the readers interested. hold off on telling everything about the things that happen and what your characters think so readers stay eager to read. 
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