Jawhariy97

Assalamualykum. I have noticed that you've had many objections against my story consequences of not repenting, I'm afraid you have misunderstood some things. This may not be your fault, perhaps the story was written very briefly and I did not explain things properly, or maybe you're  a person that jumps to conclusions without understanding the deeper meaning of things, nevertheless I have deleted the  story and when i do find time, I will surely edit it and clarify that the story was in no way encouraging people to force girls into marrying a rapist.

ibn_adam

@Jawhariy97 no problem. I didn't really feel that you were lashing out but hey that's online communication for you.
            
            Here's a tip that I've learned - in a good story NOTHING ever happens as a coincidence. Every character, every action has a role to play, even if the author intentionally seeks to downplay it - they do that to make readers think that they're insignificant before springing a surprise. 
            
            See how you can use that in your own writing in sha Allah.
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Jawhariy97

@Jawhariy97 My apologies for lashing out at you, I was extremely stressed and not in the right frame of mind when I read your comments. 
            
            I'm still a new writer here, I agree there's alot of editing that needs to be done. 
            I'm not a professional writer, so the grammar  and sentence construction will not be upto scratch , but I will try my best. 
            
            Yes you're right, if we want to improve our writing, we should learn how to take criticism.
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ibn_adam

@Jawhariy97 wa Alaykum as salaam. I do feel that many things were not explained in detail, or if they indeed had deeper meanings then they were lost in translation. The way things went from explaining that a girl got raped to her bro trying to get the dude married to her - I'm sorry i didn't find anything to convey the the disgust at somoenes rights had been VIOLATED, nor any subtext to convey that there would be legal proceedings (as is the correct procedure regardless of whether the guy acknowledged his mistake or not).
            
            Although I did have many objections, the story itself could serve as a good reminder with a little tweaking. Some of the other quips I had with the story I did not mention because it would be too complicated to do so on Wattpad. Things such as inconsistent tense, long-winded sentences and switching between active and passive voice. Of course, you probably picked those up yourself and I'm hopeful of the next draft being of better quality.
            
            Understand that when you put anything up online or on any public platform not everyone is going to be a yes-man. You are opening yourself up to criticism and it is up to you to use it that to better your story and writing skills in general. Of late I've been thinking critically even with regards to stories that have a place in my heart, so don't think I chose to single out your story specifically.
            
            WaSalaam
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