@icantfind_me hiii, so i loved the story however there are some things i would love to suggest:-
First, that the title is villainess wants to marry but her feelings about love and marriage aren't highlighted that much
The feelings that are highlighted are much of anxious and helplessness
Like when she first arrived she said that she could handle things as she is employee of the year blah blah but there are very few moments of her taking lead
I mean I know this is a dream for her so messy but I think what she is feeling or she wants to do should happen cuz at last it's her dream
Second, multiple povs like I know it's dream but that really confuses about the actual concept you are initiating
One pov ig it's enough
Third, tho in my opinion dream arc could be lengthen shorten or the chapter afterwards could be lengthen longer
Fourth, I feel like feeling of other characters except protagonist are very much monotonous or unexplained like i really couldn't understand what they are actually
I mean in dream it's quite understandable but afterwards it becomes confusion also about protagonist actions like having such a loving family why she wants to run, what was her trigger point, why the ml acted coldly with her despite being obsessed
Also i feel like ml growing obsession with fl is very less explained like it was very fast forward failed to capture the impact
Lastly, I love the concept and story
It's really unique
Kudos to you pls this is seriously constructed criticism solely
Loveee
