A little piece of advice, when writing a story make sure you tie all the loose ends. You never said why she left the first time and you rushed to much with the story, it could have been a good story but it lacks a certain je ne said quoi.
good job in TXD...i love the character of Marcelina Salanga Buburol a.k.a MACIE....nakakatuwa siya lalo na sa Bridal Shower scene...a dose of her own medicine..keep it up..