Hello @FrostJoe5 . Si Cancer to from a Watty page you messaged. I did checked yung fantasy story mo po. I got some opinions na sana makatulong po.
I'm not a grammar nazi but as a fellow writer, napapansin kasi agad ang errors gaya ng "prologue" at pag hahalo ng past at present tense na words sa chapters. Hindi rin naman ako perfect writer pero pag seryosong critic ang naging reader mo, kahit sabihin natin na may paalala ka na sadyang puro errors, they would still do it because you posted it. At makakatulong rin kung tatanggap ka po ng criticism sa kanila dahil dun nagiimprove ang isang writer. Maybe have someone check on your chapter before publishing it or ask for advices sa Wattpad groups and pages.
Pero I can see potential in the story. Interesting sya. Yun nga lang, pure fantasy is not my cup of tea. Marami kasi sa readers, mahilig sa may twist ang plots involving romance, drama, etc. Pero hindi ko po nilalahat yun. Marami lang.
Anyway, continue writing. Hindi dahil walang nagbabasa ay titigil ka na or tatamarin na magsulat. Lalong walang gaganahan na magbasa if ikaw mismo ayaw magpatuloy. Lahat ng writer na alam ko nagsisimula sa baba. They build their name and chose not to stop.
Hope that helps. ^_^
