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Here my review on your one-shot on FB titled "MY GAY FRIEND EXPERIMENTED ME".
          
          First of all, the title's grammar is off but I'm not gonna too deep into that because everyone can improve their basic writing capabilities but I can't help but notice some underlying homophobia on this short story of yours.
          
          Okay let's start off by the fact that the character is vilified in a way thay he pretended to be gay to impregnate someone— I'm okay with characters having flaws and fucked up choices in life but the way you wrote them, romanticised the manipulation and how theu deceived the female character. (which is practically r@pe)
          
          You didn't dwell on the fact that the guy was pretending to be gay and her attraction wasn't specified, she just one night decided to fuck him cause he's hot?
          
          "His gay voice disappeared" do I even have to elaborate on this one? What the fuck is a gay voice? Also, the image of him using a "gay voice" during foreplay makes me burst out laughing.
          
          "I'm not gay, baby. I made it as an excuse to make you pregnant." Is the scariest fucking thing I've ever read in my life and I scare easily. I don't know how to use proper words to express how much this sentence ia both funny and concerning.
          
          The female character was also messed up. She kissed her friend out of nowhere, without consent and pushed run down his throat. Maybe you thought it was hot— but knowing she thought he was gay, makes it disturbing as shit. 
          
          Also why did she throw up the next morning? It better because she's hungover over ONE glass of rum she didn't even drink but she didn't even drink??? Cause if it's to indicate that she's pregnant— the very next day they had sex makes the biologist on me quaking.