Hi there! You said you couldn't read my comment, so I decided to just post it on your profile! I read the first three chapters of your book, and I think you started on a great note! I'm not that great of a writer myself so I don't know what advice to give you, but I think if you try something interesting or unusual that may be cliche, yet different, it'll definitely grasp the reader's attention. Other than that, I think your writing is good :) maybe even better than mine! Cx good luck on your story!