I just read what @BigDaddyBamBam wrote and I agree with him, as I did the same...I just wrote and posted them, letting comments and the like help me in a way to understand what to improve (which was my grammar of course, since English isn't my first language). But don't let comments influence your plot. You must keep your story firm in your mind... ok, unless is taking really bad and disastrous directions, which you can see it yourself.
I honestly don't know whom I could suggest you and unfortunately I have very little to help you in reading and revising, but anyway, who am I to revise a story? Your future readers will love to do that :-)
THANK YOU for "Fallen for an angel", happy you enjoy it :-) Oh, the official ship-name for them is "ROMENNA" :-))