This is my review on your story titled 'The adorable host was picked up by the yandere big shot.' or something along the lines of that.
1. The story lacks clarity in lots of places.
2. A lot of sentences are incomplete.
3. Some words or sentences lack proper meaning.
4. The names of the characters are written differently in lots of places. I would've taken it as a mistake if it had happened only once or twice. But according to what I read, it was just too much.
5. There is neither a proper introduction for an author's note nor a couple of line spaces available before them, which makes your work quite confusing in different chapters.
6. There was also the wrong usage of pronouns, along with the wrong spelling of character names, in lots of chapters.
7. The way you describe some events or actions in your story isn't quite right or clear.
