Checked out your story like you asked. It's really good and very cliched but a lot of people love that type of stuff. Keep up the good writing and if you haven't already, check out my story Why Me? on my profile.
hi girl, I LIKE your stories. :) Kind of cliche but that's fine, as long as your story can make a big impact with the readers, being cliche won't matter. :D keep writing and if you won't mind please check out my story. Thank you!