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@Sw33tcupcak3s it's okay. Thanks btw :)

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Hello Rogi 
          
          I am dropping in, following your twitter request to check out your story and tell you what I think. Firstly though, I want to express my deepest sympathy for the terrible disaster that has struck your country, and I hope my message finds you safe and as well as can be possible at this difficult time. 
          
          To your story. I have read though your work and congratulate you on your diligence. Writing in a continual way, as you are doing, takes patience and commitment. You write with energy and have vibrant ideas. Personally, I think your dialogue is your main strength. You also have some nice visual images and character thoughts. 
          
          When you go to redraft your story - something we all need to do, to fix up our typos and tenses - I would suggest concentrating on further describing your settings. As a trick, think about what the characters hear, smell, taste, touch and see. You don't have to use all the senses all of the time, of course, but I always make sure they are woven through my stories to further show my settings. 
          
          Very good luck with your future writing.
          
          Steven

Thank you for the follow! Hope you enjoy my stories and such!
          
          Stay classy.
          
          ~ JacieBarr

@Megabucks You're welcome! :) I love the story btw.

Thank you for following and reading Love You More Than...  :-)

@sosickoffairytales no worries :)

BTW, thanks for the fanning ^_^