Ok...lol so, I read the first two chapters (Part One) and I got really confused at the end of it cuz...idk I think it said something about the two main characters fighting...but yeah I was like..."THEYRE FIGHTING ALREADY?!" Lol but yeah, it was...good. If this is your first time writing a book (ever) then you did well, but the beginning DOES need alterations. Like maybe throw some dialogue in there (the part where they were walking and talking) or be more specific and descriptive about things. I really like the plot though, it seems really interesting, but I just thought I'd say that. :)