Hie Dear Author!!!!
Without a doubt, for your very first book, your writing style is exceptionally good, beautiful, and well-organized. At the same time, the way you describe your surroundings and emotions never fails to fascinate me, and your narrative voice truly sets you apart from others.
However, as one of your readers, I would love to share a few friendly tips if you don't mind. If you include the characters' points of view (POV) alongside the plot developments, incorporate meaningful conversations or reasons that help readers connect deeply with the story and characters, and provide detailed descriptions of the situations the characters are in, it will bring a sense of completeness to your story. Additionally, longer chapters would make the reading experience even more satisfying.
Please don't take this the wrong way. I am sharing this because, seeing your writing style and ideas, I know you have the talent to pull this off and make the story even more magnificent than expected. Lastly, if any of my words offended you, I am truly sorry. I understand that writing a story is not easy and only the author knows the effort it takes, but since you are working on such a wonderful piece, I hope you take these suggestions in a friendly spirit ◜◡◝