Hi!! I wanted to ask if you could check out my book? It’s my first book ever and I really just want some reviews to tell me if my book seems good so far or if I should change any thing. Don’t do it if you feel pressured in anyway!

My birthday's coming up ( June ) and me and Park Bo Gum have the same birthday like boiii (ﾉ≧∇≦)ﾉ ﾐ ┻━┻