d0miniqueWrites
Hi there, can you review my book p[ease
Username: d0miniqueWrites
Story Title: His Alone
Genre: Dark Romance / New Adult
Status: Ongoing
Number of Chapters: prologue +6
Mature/LGBTQ+: Mature (Violence/Dark Themes)
Blurb/Summary: Tulia thought she could live a quiet life, but she didn’t account for Lucius—a man who's decided she is his fixation. Once he sets his mind on something, its a sure thing.
What I want you to focus on: I am looking for a deep dive into character consistency and pacing. Specifically, does Lucius come across as genuinely intimidating/possessive without being a caricature? I also want to know if the tension between him and Tulia feels earned or if the "darker" elements (like the psychological toll) need more development.
Specific Questions:
Does the prose feel too wordy, not word enough? or does the imagery work for the tone?
Is my linguistic writing style and grammar good or does my book feel like another bored teen writing whatever.
Link to book:
https://www.wattpad.com/story/408631215-his-alone-18%2B?utm_source=web&utm_medium=email&utm_content=share_myworks