Hello Author,
The storyline is good, but lot of grammar mistakes and you keep switching between I and the person’s name a lot in the same sentence. I think you have to decide how you want the reader to read your story meaning if it’s the person’s POV or the author’s . Keep writing and eventually you will get the hang of it. All the Best!!
@juveriashaikh1 oh sweetie, all the best for your studies... Pls do concentrate on your studies now and you can update the story later... Pls take care and stay safe ❤️
@Annieviz , hello thank you for liking my story and of course I will be updating my story as I'm busy in my 12 grade studies but OMG thank you for your feedback I love u so muchhj❤️❤️