hcassandra29

I'm writing a new book about a magic world for a 16-25 audience, Would you like to read it? I would like to read your book too, The book is called a whole new world. You can find it in my profile. Thank you for voting for my poem book.
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novelistASH

I liked the changes to the story that you made in Thorn. Having Embla sick is a great way of establishing stakes and giving Prue agency. The setting sounded interesting, solid names. The voice was a little sparse for me, but by no means bad. I would've preferred more figurative language.
          
          The dialogue between Prue and Embla was great. I liked the back and forth and it felt authentic to that kind of experience. Prue's frustration is honest, Embla's desire for control is on display and that feels right for a family.
          
          I wish I had the funds to check the book out in its entirety. What are you working on right now?