Read your story... I love the plot and details you put into it, written really well, but relationships are moving too fast. If a random girl showed up into your room, you would start freaking out. The nurse would most likely not give out that much personal information and the bodyguard wouldn't let her in. But keep posting, always think more about how it would work out in real life. Make more struggle/ more conflict.
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