hi there
I just read your story. I liked it, a realistic love story...
i commented and voted on both chapters^^ read them, ok?
my opinion?hmmmmm....it's good, a nice start and I hope it gets interesting soon. try to do some editing and stuff but aside frm that it's well done.
BTW, I hope that you could give me comments on my story too. If you have time, please read "HACK Paradise: how do you live a life you borrowed?"
vote if you like it ^^
love
Akima