CRosecrans
http://www.wattpad.com/7904394-broken-a-doctor-who-novel-chapter-17-the-beginning The dialogue begins after the third paragraph. originally the dialogue was narrative and I am trying to learn to let the dialogue move the story along. The re written section ends at the pawprints. I really do appreciate the opinion. I have put this up for a watty. I doubt it will win but if someone reads it I don't want them to roll their eyes,LOL