Heya!
Your book "Moon Spirit" is so cool!! I haven't read all the chapters yet but I love it already!! Just a little tip, try separating the paragraphs a lil more, like what each person says(so they all have their own line) , it'll make it easier to read! And I really mean it when I say your story is fantastic!! Your info about your story is so beautiful! When I read it I was like WOW!! You would be AMAZING at writing poetry!
Evelynne xx :o)