koa261

yk, I needed to distract myself, so I wrote a chapter, right? BUT WHEN I FINISHED THE CHAPTER, I SAW 3 COCKROACHES ON THE WALL. IT WAS LIKE OGGY AND THE COCKROACHES EXCEPT THERE'S NO OGGY

koa261

Having a fight scene is decent and all, but a fight scene that lasts 3 chapters and the reason why the fight happened was already revealed at the first chapter of the FS
          
          Ffs, please, it's so unnecessary to stretch out a chapter when you already revealed the big secret, and the readers will be missing NOTHING when the stretched out chapter ends

koa261

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Istfg, if you want to write a character with impressive talents and are supposed to be better than everyone, then write them like one. Don't write them as a character whose had no real experience, write them as a character who's HAS experience. 
          
          For example, a character in the U-20 team, going to do a 1v1 with an amateur or at least a learning player. And then the character in the U-20 team somehow fucking loses.
          
          DO YOU SEE WHAT I MEAN?? YOU IN THE U-20 TEAM FOR A REASON BITCH