krazeyy

Chapter 9 of CaB is up! What will happen, now that Korax got paralysed? Give it a read and find out now :>

HM_Braverman

Thanks so much for getting all the way through The Dark Heir! It makes me so happy when people like a story enough to read the whole thing. 
          
          If you care to, I’d love to hear if there were some specific things working or not working for you.  I’m in my editing phase and have made a few updates to the earlier chapters but am working through the novella overall and am incorporating reader comments.

HM_Braverman

Thank you! This is really helpful feedback!
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krazeyy

@HM_Braverman You're welcome of course! It was an amazing ride and you can be sure that I'll reread it some time when I'm in need of a good laugh :D
            
            As a small review; aside from the amazing sense of humour I really loved all the characters. We readers don't get a lot of actual "knowledge" about them and descriptions are rather sparse but I didn't mind that at all! In fact, it kinda fits the style of the story and because their personalities are so very distinct and colorful it was still easy to connect with them. A great example of this would be the architect. He appears out of nowhere yet doesn't feel out of place at all. Oh, and also Fate. She's great. I love her.
            
            I didn't notice anything that really bothered me. Except maybe, and that's kinda nitpicky, the title of the last chapter "King Arien Reigns" could be a spoiler if people look at the contents beforehand. Maybe change it to "A New King Reigns" or something like that.
            
            I hope this helps. Again, I really enjoyed reading it :)
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