RonnieKc

Hey love, the first part "zero" of the book is just to give an insight to their relationship. How they met and how that scene occurred would be explained in the chapters to come. 
          The reason why I began with when they are already "kind of" together is because these moments are what I want to focus on, introducing his character towards her and how she feels about the arrangements. It's a short story so I didn't really want it to have all their backgrounds and stuff. I'm planning on writing a longer one.
          But thank you so much for your feedback. I'll be sure to remember it for the coming chapters. 
          
          And of course, I wouldn't be mad. I'm so happy actually that you took time to read and criticize.

krissydelile

@RonnieKc ok. Now I understand. This will be good.
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RonnieKc

Hey, could you please check out my book,  To Love Hayden Lockwood. It would mean a lot to get your input. 
          https://my.w.tt/G0PW6kqClX
          
          Btw, you're so pretty, wow.

krissydelile

@RonnieKc I've read the chapter and here is my honest review(plz dont get mad): Its a little confusing because I don't know how they got together so when the people said "Hayden's whore" I've wanted to know why they are calling that. It was weird because, in the beginning, they were drunk and then the next they are in university. I think you should start the book as a series and start them meeting each other and the connection they have. Then, make a second book about the university.  Just my opinion but it's only the first chapter so it can change. But you are doing a good job with the plot outline
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krissydelile

@RonnieKc  thank you and I will check and give my honest feedback.
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