hi.! i just commented on your first story, very good by the way. i was wondering if you could do the same for me? i'm in desperate need of some constructive criticism and i'm trying to gather some good writers for an audience. i have a lot of great ideas, even if the tory seems kind of slow right now, and with these people's help i was hoping to make it into something presentable? i understand if you don't want to haha, i don't mean to be pushy like everyone else on here '^-^
please don't say it's good if it's not! thank you :)