kwhite30

Yay! O_o Finally Back on wattpad

chimercial

Critique:
          
          I've never been a huge twi-hard, but I must say Alice is my favorite character:). I think you managed to capture her personality and character traits really well. It's a very good plot too, I love the whole idea of Twilight from Alice's point of view! 
          
          However, I did notice that he dialogue seemed like it needed just a little bit of tweaking. Nothing big, I just thought I'd point that out.
          
          Again, great story, keep writing!!!!