Wattpad got rid of DMs...so now all ur followers are gonna see this.
(Kinda embarrasing for me lol)
I just want to say that yoy have great potential in the amut writing community, I read your stuff, and though it's still a bit janky and rough around the edges, you were able to deliver the FEELING of being in that scenario. No matter if one was to relate to the top or bottom, I was able to throughouly enjoy it.
2 small things for you to consider (kind constructive criticism)
1. Don't dwell on a certain feeling a person is going through for too much or else it feels repetitive. If you are saying that a character "wants it so bad" consider to only do like 2-3 reactions to the statement before moving onto the next action
2. Try to find your own style of how your plot are going to go and what the overall theme/story you want to share to the audience. (It took me a while to find my own, but when I did, I was able to start creating these stories like a fax machine)
That's all bestie, have fun