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Kidnapped- by THEM?!?! Review:	
          
          Kidnapped- by THEM?!?! (Hereon out called “Kidnapped”) is the story of a girl and her trip to a One Direction concert. However, The title doesn’t seem to fit as nothing has happened yet. I advise the author to take this book off until more chapters can be written. Along with that, almost all of the beginning needs to be carefully revised. Every character has little to no dialogue, and seems to be talking from a script. Characters should have more emotion, more life to them. For example, when the main characters friend gets 2 ticket to a one direction concert, she is yelling and bouncing off the walls. However, to convey this to the reader, the author makes all her dialogue in caps. This is hard to read, and so I skipped over most of it. However, the author does seem to want the characters to stand out and be different, so points for trying. Other than that most of the plotline has holes in it, and should be organised and resubmitted. This could definitely make an interesting read if these changes are made appropriately.
          
          Final Rating: 2

ianpastaman

Call me a Cab Review:	
          
          Call me a cab is the story of a One-Direction band member finding his long lost sister in New York City. The story starts off in the middle of a drive through town, allowing the reader to immediately meet the characters mother. The storyline and diction starts off great, however it gets a little hard to follow towards the end. For example, when Zayn walks up to the main characters house, rings the doorbell and says “I am your long lost brother” , the main character doesn’t seem very alarmed or even weirded-out. You would think that someone from New York would know not to trust most strangers, especially one that make wild claims. Other than that, the story is a prime example of what fanfiction should look like. Great work!
          
          Final Rating: 7

ianpastaman

Story of a Dancer Review:
          
          Story of a Dancer is a classic “journey of a lifetime” novel. It tells the story of a girl getting to go on a three month trip around Europe to dance for One Direction. The plot is amazing, and the reader can tell what the character is thinking and why she acts the way she does. It includes suspenseful moments, interesting twists, and most of all it gives a warm feeling to the reader. However no matter how good those are, every book has its faults. Nearly every character except for the main one seems to be incessantly blabbing on about nothing. The author should revise secondary dialogue and try to characterize some more. I personally feel that this book is the best one the author writes, and should take a lot of focus. Maybe one day it will get published. I am honored to be the first one to review this great work of art.
          
          Final Rating: 9