Jasmin452349
I think your story explains how a toxic relationship can be very draining. You have the right idea with this book but if I were you I would change everything.
For your first book you did good. However the first chapter did nothing to capture my attention and made me feel no less intrigued.
You also need to change the plot a lot better. Maybe have it jump from the past to present. And make it clearer and have more realistic scenarios.
If you want me to go into detail and help you with the story and chapters please massage me and I’ll help you.
But other then that you did good and I love how you didn’t write a romance book but actually wrote a book that has real life pain and problems.
leatehini
I think that you’re right anyway when I was writing the first chapter I wasn’t really good at it yet and not really used to it but I think that throughout the chapters my style kinda evolved I would really like if you could help me change the first chapter and make it more appealing but I wanna keep this plot i think its good
thank u sm anyway and ill wait fr ur response
Jasmin452349
Oh and change the summary. And make it more appealing. Like “When he loved me he was playing me. All the love he had for me was a way he used me. Pulled my heart made it leave the ground. My life was shitty and he made it better for while. For a while I was in love now I’m in pain. He wants me back says he’ll change. Says he’ll be better for me. Love me. Devote to me. But all I can sense are his lies. His dirty lies. All I ever wanted was him. All I ever loved was him. But I need to stay away from him but all I can do is be with him.” Something like that