y/n the dumbest

Hi atiny :D the first chap of my new book is already published, pls check it out and give your opinions :D
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/290494012?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=rauszydai&wp_originator=U%2BxLg%2BhH0Kgn8tpDuwmubtKWP9Pnqq%2FsRF7nUr96RDPbXn4PP6Ta2zizZsC72FS8upBS5iVaPEhELj7uPV%2BLlx%2Bnrx%2Br3WlDmhkhfi0JvAOuab055L55QLrOAfTpHW%2FA

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if cinderella's shoes fit perfectly, how did it fall off :<

Hey, love, would you mind reading and reviewing my book? It could help me improve my writing significantly. 
          Here's the link:
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/231920266-sugar-daddy-%C2%BB-bangchan
          Have a lovely day!! :)