@lightlygel
Your story is actually really good! The pacing flows well, your grammar is solid with no major errors, and the way you wrote from each character’s POV truly reflects their personalities. For example, you made it clear that Angel is the eldest child just through her actions—there was no need to even say it outright, which was really well done. Overall, if you’re asking for my opinion, I’d say your story is genuinely great, and I hope more people discover and appreciate it. This isn’t sugarcoated either—I usually give honest feedback.