Okay, I have started reading your "golden" fanfiction and once constructive criticism that i have for you is the fact that you should improve your prose. It seems like you were just writing what happened instead of writing the experience. Overall, I think that your story is engaging, but you really need to improve your prose. Keep it up! Also check out my new story "Glitter isn't Gold". I have started following you, but I'm a new writer and yet, I don't have any followers. I don't mean to beg, in just asking you to check it out.
