Mads

IM WRITING A NEW STORY BE PREPARED 

Soooooo I can see a lot happening with your story. They're only a few things I would say… do the capital letters, since you have exclamation marks at the ends of the sentence, don't put the sentences in caps. And when you're writing is someone is relaying or your heroine is answering , don't always say "he said", " I said." Try to make the characters in a way that they're performing an action. This is something I've noticed in a lot books. The authors do not always use "he/she/I said."

New story soon, look forward to it