manntar

@mana96 yeah, you might have noticed, but I got rid of everything. IM doesn't really count. I am working on something more long term. Might get time to put it up soon. God, I hate having school so much...  No time for important stuff, like story writing.

manntar

@mana96 yeah, you might have noticed, but I got rid of everything. IM doesn't really count. I am working on something more long term. Might get time to put it up soon. God, I hate having school so much...  No time for important stuff, like story writing.

mana96

Oka, and I just read "Some People are Lucky... Some are Not" and it has a good plot to it. I cant really critique this, seeing as there isnt much to it, not intended to sound harsh. Continue another chapter, and I will truthfully tell you what I think. I was wondering. Could you read my first chapter for my book, "Not Everything's Sunny," and honestly critique it too? Well, Im waiting for the next update on this story, and hopefully PPITL.
           -TC, Mana (;

mana96

Well, I read PPITL like two in the morning, and I continued after the first chapter, which is a good sign. I think you have an overall idea of what youre doing. But one thing I would think is to bring the book more alive. alot of people have a hard time doing this, especially me. make the reader FEEL whats going on. Also, Im not sure whether this is a mystery book or not, but it kinda can be, if you word things right, so that you give enough away, but not too much. Lastly, make a better way of distinguishing when the characters speak, sometimes I got a little confused and had to go back to reread, unless that was your intention, then okaa. Honestly though, I like the idea of the book, and if you wouldnt mind, Id like to see the end of it. It seems interesting. If you dont want to, I understand. I didnt realize you had a book dedicated to me, but Im gonna go read that first chapter and give you an honest critique (: