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Hi,
          How are you, I just write my first story but I need an outsider to tell me what they think about it,
          Can please help me check it
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/331931446?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Vmoon9&wp_originator=WbBo%2FUuXFqUj15K6UX%2FyMOuJVINFAkNfwMnfNWqTG28kowe%2Bxt9Z2BgJwclgl947g7SwMxa7QtgpiI1XvkCSm6S3s4R9YHf%2BKcvkZXHK84TgiHFx3bEncFgGagbFG%2FOC