@absence_ofColor “Then the fire reached my neck. Just imagine flames flickering around you, doing some kind of devil’s dance. They probably were, because in this world the devil is made of white-hot flames and empty eye-sockets.”
These are the kinds of sentences I LIVE for. I’m a sucker for comparisons and/or similes, especially when done right. It’s relatively hard to integrate them properly, it seems. Sometimes, an over-usage can oversaturate the concept in the reader’s eyes, but space them too far apart and they’ll be longing for more. Yet here, it didn’t feel out of place in the slightest.
Being descriptive of your surroundings can help captivate a reader. It paints a picture in their head of what the character is feeling and seeing, and it helps them to further understand the situation, no matter the complexity.
Using a distinctive set of words can not only help further bolster the experience, but it also makes oneself appear more wise. We all understand English is a difficult language to grasp, but what’s holding us back from a bit of embellishment, eh?
That being said, I see great potential in your writing. I hope you continue to put your all in every carefully crafted story in the near future, it was an absolute joy to read your creation!
