micaelabryant

You're completely right about, and thank you for giving my story another chance. Riley was definitely not developed right, but back in season one I wasn't quite sure I knew her character well enough, so I placed her in whatever trope I could find. And I totally know what you mean when you talked about character development. I find that if a certain character in a book I'm reading isn't behaving properly it could turn me off from the entire book, no matter how good the rest of the plot was. And I'm not sure if I will, but I have been thinking of removing the epilogue and finishing the story with a more developed plot line, since those joshaya moments in Ski Lodge 1 & 2 were...exciting for the ship.

@itsmethequeen @itsmethequeen It wasn't your writing style that bothered me. I just have this problem where I become picky after a certain level of sleep deprivation. This pickiness results in a short patience span and if the character is not developed in the way I want the character to be, I move on from the book. I felt that Riley would not have made the decisions you had her make, and I needed to get over that. It is a problem I have to deal with, and is not your fault. 
            Also, you making me feel guilty was not a bad thing, because it made me go back and give Riley another chance. Through this, I finished the first one and read the second story you had in that storyline. I found both to be very good. Please don't feel bad for making me feel guilty, because it was the good kind of guilty that forced me to realize that I was judging too harshly. 
            Furthermore, in regards to your second story, if you were looking for a source of Joshaya inspiration, the last two gmw episodes would probably be the best location. 

*blushes* I would completely understand if you had stopped reading tbh. I keep meaning to go back and edit, but I never seem to find the time! Sorry about accidently making you feel guilty, but I hope you enjoyed reading anyway! 
            PS. Riley was being a little bitxh, I know.