midnightintheashes

Thanks for following. I meant what I said. I wish I could express thoughts like you.

@midnightintheashes  Yes, I could have spent more time on their character, but I didn't want to make the story too long. Maybe I should have. Thanks for the comments.

@jeshi99 @jeshi99 I like the concept behind Life After Death, especially the advanced technology that can sustain artificial life. One thing that I'm not so keen on is that I don't feel like you differentiate too much between the girls; Diane to some degree, but especially with Janet, Adele and the newer arrivals, I kept feeling like there was a lot of room in which you could have furthered their character development. I really like how you underlined their dependence on George though when one of his circuits failed. Cheers

Thanks for the votes.

@VioletMyth Breath of life is seriously amazing. There's nothing I would change about it; one of my very favourite novels and I love the characters. So so captivating. Thank you

@Kuronoshio haha i certainly do know now. No problem at all and THANK YOU for that amazing (and supremely entertaining) torrent of advice

ps. Now you know what I mean about crashing your lawn :-)
          Hope you don't mind.

@Kuronoshio the Loyalty Tests were great. I really like how you set up the tests so that they were always one step ahead of the participants and how you created distractions like how the test wasnt really when they tested her. Also, the topic you explored was fascinating; i feel like you did a wonderful job exploring the darker corners of the human psyche. Having said that, it was quite honestly terrifying to read (I'm quite literally slept with the lights on - let's just say it wasnt light bedtime reading). I feel like you could have made some of the characters (perhaps Sakura or Yuki) more likeable in the sense that you could have reflected a little more on their humane side? At times, it just felt like everyone in the Loyalty Tests were focused solely on their survival, losing their humanity in the process. If this was what you were going for, by all means ignore me, but I think it would have been a little more enjoyable to read if you reminded us once in a while of the fact that these are children who have been forced into this. For example, Sakura's sister could have been a little more developed if you'd written say flashbacks from Sakura's point of view, possibly with her realization that that's no longer the driving force behind her need to survive (if that's what you were going for). But a very well written, concisely planned novel. Quick question, how did you plan it? I really like how the truth is revealed after events have occurred and I was wondering if you went back during the planning process to drop in the occasional clue. 

Hello there!
          Thanks so much got reading and voting for The Loyalty Tests. I greatly appreciate it. (^_−)−☆

Hello again.  Thanks so much for reading and voting for Flawed.  Really do appreciate it. Can I also take this opportunity to be the first person here to unofficially welcome you to Wattpad.