Okay, first of all, your action scenes are pretty great already. With me, I am a slacker, I usually use a very brief set of words or find a video to post for that part. You are really a talented writer and I think what made you stand out for me was the fact you did your research and told the story in the beginning so well, not making it sound like it was a book report, I think that is awesome. But me, on the other hand, I need a lot more practice and still have quite a lot to learn about writing, I don't know if you are familiar with kpop but the story I am writing is centered on that and it would be really great if you could evaluate my, probably poor, writing skills. No one has given me an honest and descriptive comment on it yet and I hope you can be that first person. Thank you for taking the time to read this!
