Your story is very well-written. I've read the first chapter and I'm already interested. I'm sure it'll develop into a popular book. Sadly, just like any new books, the book you wrote did not get as much readers as you expected. Maybe you would like to make the cover or synopsis much more interesting and maybe message random account to promote your book.
Overall, it's a good story with a good beginning and hopefully a good ending.
Thank you. Words that may offense you is written unconsciously, please do not take it seriously, but only as a mere correction from your reader.
