Alana

Thanks for the follow back :)

@wildwicked Absolutely! i'll get right on it.

@ElinaJames haha well hello there fellow citizen (it'd be awk if you're not american cause then my statement would be false since you wouldnt actually be a fellow citizen...but close enough right?)

Hey hey :P

@YuffieProductions lol no problem. i try

@dolapo66 Yeah, that makes perfect sense! I know the setting and descriptions is where I struggle most as a writer, so I'm definitely working on that. I'll add more of those little details, too. Thank you.

@YuffieProductions Well what I noticed from some books is that sometimes authors make their characters fixate on insignificant things that sometimes add to the storyline. Like you know when there are moments as people that we notice little things about our surroundings. Like we focus on a bird while looking out a window or something. In one book I read, the main character noticed this snake eat this little animal before he had to end his friend's life. Kinda eerie if you ask me. It's just these little things that sort of contribute to the protagonist seeming more human because they not only notice the task at hand but all the little things too. The setting is just very important to explain so the audience can know how to feel. Show not tell, you know? I mean you do that already but the dialogue just kinda seems to be more dominate for your story than anything else. 

@dolapo66 If you wouldn't mind pointing them out, that'd be great! Anything at all you can give me that might help would be very much appreciated. 

@YuffieProductions oh and I have a couple other critiques but they are kinda more suggestions and idk if they're necessary. Just stuff I noticed in books I read so I'm not sure you want to know those too.

@YuffieProductions Thanks! And no problem. No point in seeing the only author I aspire to be like leave wattpad for something I could easily provide. Btw, you story flows extremely well.