Hello Dear!!
I am currently reading your book Aarya!
This is such a lovely story line ,the plots are interesting as well as the story line. I am saying this from a reader perspective.. your story line is awesome but sometimes it becomes hard to read it because of sentence breakage and punctuation. Grammatically you are good but the punctuation and line break make it hard. It's not coming from hate .. just a suggestion, if you can work on it it will be a treat to read your books.
But keep going that's what improves you and also keep reading more books to understand the flow. More power to you . All the best