I really like the idea behind your book,the billionaire’s baby one. I also understand that you were just trying to get your story out there and then edit it. But sometimes when stories do certain things it’s hard to even read them despite the facts I mentioned before. I would love to go back to your story once it was edited. The story is progressing too fast, it isn’t coherent to flow. It’s a bit stilted. Also when building their character, stick to one representation. I love your idea though it’ll make a great story. Keep it up.
