Oh my gosh, I feel really bad now. I know I was just offering criticism, but I still feel bad. Was this the first critique you got? It might have been a bit too harsh. But, you should still probably take my advice to edit it. I honestly really liked it, and I feel super bad that I was the cause for you to take your story down. I'd like to critique your other stories, but I don't know if you'd like me too. Again, I am so sorry. And feel free to message me too. :)