ruti_writes

Hello...
          I am sorry for posting it here but can you please give my book a try..
          Actually it's my first time that I am writing something and I know my book will not be perfect..
          But still can you check it.. 
          And also tell me about it's flaws. So that I can correct it...it will really mean a lot..
          Thank you <3
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/377074592?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=writingwhatwe_feel

ruti_writes

@writingwhatwe_feel I just added the link so it will be easy for you to find it..
            But do tell me the imperfections on that book
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thefreebird_05

Hey sweetie, if you're looking for a childhood-enemies-to-lovers slowburn, this is the book for you.
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          You have something of mine in your possession
                                                                                              -My heart
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            She was his childhood enemy,
            His most cherished memory.
            
            You say beautiful and it's her smile he sees,
            You say nuisance and he'd tease her it's was she.
            
            She was the laughter to his tight-lipped smile,
            
            The glaring eye to his teasing smirk,
            
            The noise to his silence,
            
            The chaos to his quiet,
            
            The question to his answers,
            
            The chai to his espresso,
            
            She was the fairytale to his tragedy
            
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          https://www.wattpad.com/story/344063822?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=thefreebird_05

itsnotzaahhh

Heyyy<3
          
          I am writing a book called promises and I'm kind of new to this writing thing and I've only posted one chapter  so would you take a look at my book and tell me if it's missing something and if I need to add something to it and all and whta you feel about my writting if it's terrible could you pleaseee pleaseee held me to improve it as I really enjoyed writting the first chapter and i am a bit excited. . .  So if you do have the time will you please check it out will you
          
          Thank you for your time<3

mushroomcrunch123

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@itsnotzaahhh  Hey, I read your book tbh Its GOOD. You are a beginner it will get better with time just never stop writing. 
            And sorry for replying so so so late i had exams.
            (thing you can improve now- try to seperate lines by paragraph i mean it gets overwhelming to read continuous writing.
            Try to write in active voice for example : She said, "I am tired of this shit." 
            Its a bit difficult I know but nothing you cant tackle.)
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SunithaReddy647

Bro seriously u have the best taste. Thank God someone was mentioning these books like enchanted by love,ishqiya,from here to eternity,etc. otherwise for me they are so underrated and i suggest you to read Teri deewani also

mushroomcrunch123

@SunithaReddy647 By -Writer_Aayrah ???
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mushroomcrunch123

@SunithaReddy647 will try it..
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SunithaReddy647

Hey try javedaan hai ishq tujhse too. The male lead is greener universe
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