myproximacentauri

@MarionAvalon You just used d'you think a whole lot for most of the characters :)

MarionAvalon

Did I? I'll have to look at that. Thanks for pointing it out!
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myproximacentauri

@MarionAvalon your story was great! i loved the development of the plot and the overall story, but i did notice that you used overused some phrases. it was great all in all though!

MarionAvalon

@_dustandshadows_ and thanks for all your votes! Glad you enjoyed it! My, you read it all in one day ha ha???
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MarionAvalon

Thanks so much! Yes, that's quite possible ha ha d'you think you could give me a few examples? Thanks for the feedback!
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