@WPC_writer just finished reading the last two chapters!! Your writing is very good I love the story so far! Can’t wait for more! The only things I’d say to add to make your writing more professional and immersive is add moments where you describe the character’s surroundings (what they can see, touch, smell, hear and taste) in detail, and describe the character’s emotions a bit more. And lastly correct some spelling and grammar mistakes, an example would be no capital letters at the beginning of sentences. For that you can always use a spelling or grammar checker online, I personally use quillbot to correct grammar and Grammarly for spelling, but use whatever best works for you if you chose to use one <3
