Ohh hello
You're welcome, sorry if my English is messy. I'll read and understand your story, but I prefer a story with a happy ending for the main character. Sometimes I can feel sad for a while if a story ends tragically.
And as a reader in general, I'm very uncomfortable when an author's writing is messy (paragraphs, punctuation, etc.). It makes the reader dizzy, even if the story idea is interesting. I'll immediately abandon the story and never read it again.
I've skimmed through your story and found it to be a good idea. The paragraphs, etc., are well-structured. As for the plot, it depends on how you develop it. Too much conflict sometimes can be frustrating or even boring. It would be more exciting if there were a plot twist the reader wasn't aware of.
Sorry I typed too long, hope it works^_^