@pasdusername Your story is amazing! The emotion is palpable. Yes, sometimes, you could have made different word choices, but that's nothing a simple google search can't handle. The writing style is great, the grammar is on point, the dialogues are, as a teen would say, grand and awe-inspiring.
Unfortunately, I can't beta read it right now, because I have exams (my WHOLE LIFE is going to be decided in a 5 minute viva of ten questions), but I am definitely going to read it afterwards.